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Model example
Write a description of the fruit available in the strawberry patch.
Like rubies glistening in a cave, you could smell ripe strawberries before you saw them, the fragrance mingling with the smell of sun on damp ground. It was the smell of June, the last day of school, when we were set free. I’d lie on my stomach in my favourite patches, watching the berries grow sweeter and bigger under the leaves. Scarcely bigger than a raindrop, each tiny wild berry was dimpled with seeds under the cap of leaves. From that vantage point I could pick only the reddest of the red, leaving the pink ones for tomorrow. Delicious!
The pupil begins with a simile stater to engage the reader with a clear visual comparison of the topic.
The pupils demonstrates accurate spelling of ambitious vocabulary.
The pupil clearly demonstrates evidence of planning using a wide range of sensory description.
The writer uses a range of sentence lengths and starters to add rhythm and variation to their description.
The pupil uses a range of synonyms to add varied and interesting vocabulary choices.
The description ends on a one word sentence.
Sensory Description
11.1
Visual words
sublime hazy fluorescent
murky vibrant iridescent
shadowy vivid kaleidoscopic
11.2
Auditory words
humming faint deafening
serene roaring muted
thundering crunch melodious
11.3
Words linked
to taste and smell
fresh odourless fragrant
acrid suffocating bitter
pungent zesty sweet
11.4
Tactile words linked to feel and texture)
gritty rough abrasive
humid damp spongey
oily coarse metallic
Varying sentence lengths
This sentence has five words. Here are five more words. Fiveword sentences are fine. But several together become monotonous. Listen to what is happening. This writing is getting boring. The sound of it drones. It’s like a stuck record. The ear demands some variety.
Now listen. I vary the sentence length, and I create music. Music. The writing sings. It has a pleasant lilt, a harmony. I use short sentences. And I use sentences of medium length.
- Gary Provost
Upgrade your sentences
12.1
Simile starter
Like rubies glistening in a cave, the strawberries waited to be picked.
12.2
Double adjective start
Bright and vibrant, the strawberries waited to be picked.
12.3
Triple noun/ adjective colon
Fresh, sweet and delicious: the strawberries waited to be picked.
12.4
Not only but also
Not only were the the strawberries waiting to be picked but they also looked tantalising.
12.5
So, so
So vibrant, so tempting, the strawberries waited to be picked.
12.6 Adverb comma Tantalisingly, the strawberries waited to be picked.
12.7 Verb beginning Beckoning, the strawberries waited to be picked.
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Knowledge Base: English The Island at the End of Everything Year 7 | Term 2