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First, I really admire his fighting spirit because he confronted difficult situations and

he always finds a solution without spent the calm. For example, when he had trouble in his
house with his mom he doesn't lose the calm and he quickly looks up for a solution. Second,

he is able to acquire his goals luckily, he had a teacher who taught him the real way to see
the life and the real world. For instance, he always told him that we live in a circle where we

are judging others and this is repeating every day. Finally, Christopher's ability to be a team
worker. This gives to him the opportunity to get any job. Also, this is an advantage because

some important companies called him to work with.

To sum up, Christopher's life is an inspiration from others and I really admire him.
I want and hope to practice things like him in my own life.

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My role model is my friend Christopher who motivates others to follow their dreams.
I admire him because he has a fighting spirit and ability to get goals, and the ability to work

in a team. I admire him because he has a fighting spirit and ability to get goals, and the ability

to work in a team.
First, I really admire his fighting spirit because he confronted difficult situations and

he always finds a solution without spent the calm. This is one reason for that many people

see him like a role model and me too. For example, when he had trouble in his house with
his mom he doesn't lose the calm and he quickly looks up for a solution. Second, he is able

to acquire his goals luckily, he had a teacher who taught him the real way to see the life and
the real world. For instance, he always told him that we live in a circle where we are judging

others and this is repeating every day. Finally, Christopher's ability to be a team worker. This
gives to him the opportunity to get any job. Also, this is an advantage because some important

companies called him to work with.

To sum up, Christopher's life is an inspiration from others who want to change their
lives and I really admire him for his achievements in his life. I want and hope to practice

things like him in my own life and get a good life in the future.
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