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Step 4. First Draft

Throughout the years many social groups go under the radar and are forgotten. One
social group that is popular are rockers. I consider all the of the “Linkin Park” band members
as my role models because they are still playing together until this day. Nowadays the amount
of time a band sticks together is very short. This band has been playing for almost 14 years and
this shows me that they are faithful to each other and their fans. Another reason why I consider
them my role models is because some of their songs lyrics speak about social problems. This
shows me that they want to be the difference and with their music change people’s perspectives
in a positive way. The last reason I consider them as my role models is because they are humble.
This band hasn’t forgotten where they came from are always willing to help whenever they
can. In conclusion that’s why I consider them my role models

* Topic Sentence
* General Statement 1
* Examples GS1
* General Statement 2
* Examples GS2
* General Statement 3
* Examples GS3
* Concluding Sentence

Step 5. Final Draft

Throughout the years many social groups go under the radar and fade away. One social
group that is well known and is still making headlines are rockers. I consider all the band
members of “Linkin Park” as my role models for some reasons. First, they are still playing
together until this day. Nowadays the amount of time a band stays together is very limited. This
band has been playing for almost 14 years and this shows me that they are faithful to each other
and their fans. Another reason why I consider them my role models is because some of their
songs lyrics talk about social problems. This shows me that they want to be the difference and
with their music they can change people’s perspectives in a positive way. The last reason I
consider them as my role models is because they are humble. This band hasn’t forgotten where
they came from and are willing to help whenever they can. In short, these are my main reasons
why I consider the “Likin Park” band my role models.

* Topic Sentence
* General Statement 1
* Examples GS1
* General Statement 2
* Examples GS2
* General Statement 3
* Examples GS3
* Concluding Sentence