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STEP 4: FIRST DRAF

My Role Model
My role model is my mom because she is a good person, help to other people and she

is a valiant woman for several reasons. First, she is a good person. [She takes care of her
children every day in each moment. For example, she calls me every day to know if I have

money to food, to do something money to food, to do something about the University, and

she asks me if I miss her. Also, my mom is a good neighbor. She is very friendly with all
neighbors.] Second, she helps to other people. For instance, [when someone has a big or

small problem, she helps to resolve it. If one son or daughter can not to do something, she
immediately gives some advice to do it]. Finally, she is a valient woman. [When she was

eight years old, her mother left her with her father. She had a very hard childhood because
her father hit her when she couldn’t do something. She overcome all her problems with

helpness of my dad. After that, my mom got married and she efforts every day for her children

don’t have the same life that she had.] As a conclusion, my mom is a good example to follow
in my life.

STEP 5: FINAL DRAFT

Many people have role models or people they look up to in their life. Whether it be
an actress, super hero, sports star, or just someone you admire they inspire you and the

decisions you make. For me, that person is my mom she is very beautiful, successful. Ever
since I could remember she has been right beside me supporting any dream or goal I was

trying to reach. When I am older I hope I could be there for my kids the way she is for me.

First, thing I admire is her beauty. [She takes care of her children all the time No

matter if she is dressed casual or professional she always looks clean cut and ready for
anything that may come up. She has a beautiful big white smile that can warm up a room.

She has very high cheekbones, which many people wish they were born with. Her eyes are a
very light brownish green color, just looking into them you can see all the love she has for

others. My mom is pretty tall I would say, but not to tall. I am very lucky to of inherited my

mom’s genes. She goes over and beyond for her children and does her best to make sure
everything is to its full potential to take care of her family.]