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TUTOR NOTES - This is a piece of writing with many moments of understandable
human (you insult me - human indeed) emotion. Your narrators' voice comes through
clearly. In your autobiographical piece, you convey a great sense of immediacy, especially in
the confrontation. The shape of the piece the piece of writing is appropriate for the
sequence of thoughts and events that you present. These are evident in the
autobiographical piece but the commentary could have been more substantial and sharply
focussed. In particular, it would have helped to go into more detail about what literary
models did - or did not - influence you. (would if I could.) there is good writing here,
Wendy, but check my comments.
OVERALL MARK - 57
