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Knowledge Base: English Conflict – Creative Writing Year 9 | Autumn Term 2
Model example
Like a banshee across the endless white expanse, the wind howled, a symphony of frosted teeth gnashing at my exposed skin. I pulled my hood lower, the thin wool offering scant protection against the Arctic bite. My breath came out in ragged gasps, each one a tiny white prayer flag whipping away in the gale. Eight hours. Eight, godforsaken, hours slogging through this frozen wasteland, my feet numb blocks encased in heavy boots. But the gnawing in my gut wasn't just hunger. It was anticipation, a cold, metallic thrill that pulsed through my veins alongside the icy wind. They were out here. Somewhere, beneath the bruised purple twilight bleeding into the horizon, the enemy were huddled. Fools for underestimating the cold, for thinking they could hide in this desolate expanse. They'd underestimated me too. They probably pictured a scared rookie, shivering in his parka. Wrong. The cold didn't scare me. It invigorated me. It sharpened my senses, honed my instincts to a razor's edge. They'd hear me coming alright. Not the crunch of boots, no. They'd hear this howling wind, carrying a new melody- the song of a hunter closing in for the kill.
Using simile to present the weather as an antagonistic force.
Use of adjectives to build an image of the surrounding.
Using repetition to present the tiresome nature of the job.
Use of words like "metallic" and "honed" reflect the soldier's feelings towards the upcoming conflict or how he subconsciously views himself.
Use of metaphor to exaggerate the pain of the situation the speaker is in.
Use of words like "bruised" and "bleeding" to describe the surroundings could be used to foreshadow later events.
Use of fragment sentences to present a straightforward emotion or feeling to a situation.
The use of the word "sog" to show his final feelings about the job to come.
1. Upgrade your sentences
1.1
Simile starter
Like rubies glistening in a cave, the strawberries waited to be picked.
1.2
Double adjective start
Bright and vibrant, the strawberries waited to be picked.
1.3
Triple noun/ adjective colon
Fresh, sweet and delicious: the strawberries waited to be picked.
1.4
Not only but also
Not only were the the strawberries waiting to be picked but they also looked tantalising.
2. Sensory Description
2.1
Visual words
bruised
bleeding
azure
1.5 So, so
1.6 Adverb comma
1.7 Verb beginning
So vibrant, so tempting, the strawberries waited to be picked. Tantalisingly, the strawberries waited to be picked. Beckoning, the strawberries waited to be picked.
2.2 Auditory words howled symphony gasps
2.3
Words linked
to taste and smell
odour
stench
acrid
2.4
Tactile words (linked to feel and texture)
gnawing
gnashing
soothing
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