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• Change: “The language capabilities and challenges facing every child, including those who are learning English as a second language, must be carefully considered as we plan experiences and instruction.”
To: “As we plan, we must carefully consider the language capabilities and challenges of every child.”
Use simple, everyday language.
• Change: “...obviously, however, it is not enough simply to set forth a shared vision.”
To: “...but a shared vision isn’t enough.”
• Change: “...develop data to demonstrate the correlation between laboratory test results and field performance.” To: “...test lab results in the real world.”
• Change: “...accordingly, students need to read and study literary texts in a variety of genres, including poetry, short stories, novels, plays, essays, and biographies.”
To: “...so students should read and study all kinds of lit- erature.”
• Change: “...throughout the past decade.” To: “...for 10 years.”
Use as few words as possible.
• Change: “Individuals who are competent at communicat- ing with others are sensitive to the needs of different audi- ences.”
To: “Good communicators know different audiences have different needs.”
• Change: “visual diagrams.” To: “diagrams.”
• Change: “the positive as well as the negative.” To: “the good and the bad.”
Use contractions.
• Change: “We will not....” To: “We won’t....”
• Change: “That, quite frankly, is tragic.” To: “That’s tragic.”