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ACTIVITY 10 Steps to Composing

Read the paragraph. Then follow the directions in the 10 steps to edit the information and composition of
this paragraph. Write your revised paragraph on a separate sheet of paper. Be careful with capitalization
and punctuation. Check your answers with the class.

CLASSIFICATION PARAGRAPH

Levels of Airline Service

1 For long-distance flights, all airlines these days offer three levels of service. They are
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Economy Class, Business Class, and First Class. These levels differ in price and comfort.
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4 As most tourists know, Economy Class is the cheapest but also the least comfortable

level of service. It is also known as Coach. Seats are narrow and legroom is tight. On
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many airlines, passengers must pay extra to reserve a specific seat or check an extra bag.
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8 One solution is to pay five times more and fly Business Class. In Business Class, the
seats are wider. In Business Class, there is more legroom. The food and service are
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superior. If these luxuries are not enough, travelers can choose to fly First Class. They
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can enjoy private suites, gourmet food, showers, and even massages. However, this
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level of service is expensive. A ticket in First Class can cost twice as much as Business
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Class and up to twenty times as much as Economy Class.

1. In sentence 1, add the word nearly before all airlines for accuracy.
2. Sentence 2 lists the three levels of service in sentence 1. Combine the sentences by replacing the
period in sentence 1 with a colon. Delete They are from sentence 2.

3. In sentence 3, add the word both after differ for emphasis.

4. In sentence 4, add the adjective clause which is also known as Coach Class after Economy Class.
Place commas before and after the adjective clause. Delete sentence 5.
5. The word level is used in sentences 3 and 4. For variety, change it to class in sentence 4.

6. Combine sentences 9 and 10 into one sentence. Delete In Business Class from sentence 10, and add
the conjunction and.

7. In sentence 12, add the word wealthy before travelers.
8. Combine sentences 12 and 13 by adding the word where.

9. Move However to the end of sentence 14.

10. In sentence 15, add a ticket in before Business Class and before Economy Class for parallelism.

156 Unit 11 Using Parallel Structure

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