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Pain:

1. Being a single parent

2. Not having enough money

3. Working long hours along with going to school

Terror:

1. Something could happen to me—illness or whatever—and keep

me from taking care of her

2. Things that could happen to her

Carla’s Rough Draft with Notes

From her new outline, Carla wrote a rough draft. Then she met with

her instructor for a conference on her draft. Here is Carla’s rough

draft, with notes she made at the conference.

Since my daughter Alisa was born, I have lived with the joy, the

pain, and also the sheer terror of raising a child alone. Being a

single parent can happen to anyone but I never thought it would

happen to me. I had dreams of a marriage that would last forever and

of strong, healthy children who would always feel secure in the love
of two full-time parents.

Move the thesis to the end of the introduction.