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The hallway was crowded. I had just ten minutes between classes. I

needed to feed my soft drink addiction. I entered the little room off

the main hallway. Brightly lit vending machines stood in a row. They

invited onlookers to pop in a bill, a charge card, or several coins.

Students crowded around the machines. I heard a muffled curse from
the front of the crowd. Someone began to shake one of the machines. I

heard someone else call, “Look out!” The large machine began to tip

forward. People screamed and scattered out of the way. The heavy

machine landed against the opposite wall with a crash. Everyone

suddenly seemed in a hurry to get to class. I left, too. I headed for
the stairs. I never did get my soft drink.