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STEP 4: FIRST DRAFT
Bob Marley was part of the social group Rastafarians. Bob Marley has influenced many
people and I think he is a role model for important reasons. Bob’s music has changed
people’s life. Every son gave people important messages. Many songs were about love,
friendship, so people understood that they had everything to be happy. Bob’s songs changed
the way how people see problems. Bob was an optimistic person. He had the solution for
each problem, he just started to write songs and he felt better. Bob never gave up even when
he had trouble. Bob was a humble man. Even when he was a famous singer, he tried to help
people. Also, he was not ambitious. Bob did not want to acquire wealth and have a lot of
money. Bob Marley had different perspectives about life. He was honest and he was not
selfish. For these reasons he is a role model to follow.
STEP 5: FINAL DRAFT
Bob Marley was part of the social group Rastafarians. Bob Marley has influenced many
people and I think he is a role model for important reasons. First, Bob’s music has changed
people’s life. Every son gave people important messages. For example, many songs were
about love, friendship, so people understood that they had everything to be happy.
Furthermore, Bob’s songs changed the way how people see problems. Another reason is that
Bob was an optimistic person. He had the solution for each problem, he just started to write
songs and he felt better. Also, he believed that life had wonderful opportunities. Bob never
gave up even when he had trouble. Finally, Bob was a humble man. Even when he was a
famous singer, he tried to help people. Also, he was not ambitious. Bob did not want to
acquire wealth and have a lot of money, he thought that money does not mean happiness. As
conclusion, Bob Marley had different perspectives about life. He was honest and he was not
selfish. For these reasons he is a role model to follow.
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