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health. If they’re looking for something to keep them awake, they should
take a brief walk or a large glass of water.

 What are you going to explain?
 Answer: Look up for some remedies to substitute energy drinks and explain
them to teenagers.

Essay Outline
 Below is an outline of what your final essay will look like. You will complete this
as we learn about each part of the essay in class.
 Be sure to group your evidence according to their commonalities (which pieces
make sense together?). These commonalities should fall under the topics presented
in your thesis statement.
 Each body paragraph should tackle only ONE key idea (your thesis should have
TWO key ideas).
 Support each key idea with relevant facts and evidence. Avoid repeating
facts/evidence in different paragraphs, as it will make your essay look as though it
was not carefully planned.
 Use the acronym PEEL to ensure your body paragraphs have everything they need.
 Point: make your point (topic sentence directly related to key idea in thesis)
 Evidence: support your point with evidence and examples
 Explain: explain how the evidence supports your point
 Link: link this point to the next point (for the last body paragraph, conclude
the paragraph)
Introductory Paragraph

Hook: Laws for teenagers better health

Discussion of topic/Connection to text: Energy drinks

Thesis Statement: Due to the health risks that accompany these drinks, many communities,
from Los Angeles to Chicago, have considered laws banning the sale of energy drinks to
people under age 18 (“L.A. May Become”). Such laws are wise and should be approved
throughout the nation because these products bring far more harm than good to teen
consumers.

Body Paragraph 1

Point (topic sentence): Advertising encourages teenagers to buy energy drinks.

Evidence: A recent report by the World Health Organization says the products are potentially
“a significant public health problem,” especially for youth (Breda).