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Explanation: In fact, teens are so susceptible to the negative effects of large doses of caffeine,
including high blood pressure and heart palpitations, that a handful of deaths have been
connected to these products (Breda).

Link (transition):
- In fact
- Take the case
- Moreover,

Evidence: Take the case of 14-year-old Anais Fournier, who died from a heart attack in
December 2011 after consuming two 24-ounce cans of Monster Energy (Alfonsi).

Explanation: Energy drinks can cause heart attacks by drinking them quickly and regularly

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- Many critics of the proposed law change argue that there is already too
much government intervention in people’s lives and that teens are
mature enough to spend their own money as they wish.

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Point (topic sentence): Government doesn’t want to take place in helping.

Evidence: “They are sure that teenagers can choose how they spend their money

Explanation: People over 18 can’t legally invest in these products.

Link (transition):
- Furthermore,
- Another argument
- For example,
- Surely,

Evidence: they will consider to preserve the health of Young teenagers

Explanation: It’s a worrying part because they are trying to protect the next generation.

Link: Transition to conclusion
- When one considers health risks, financial implications, and legal
precedent, it is clear that approving this new law is the right move.

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