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I printed out a second draft of my script; it was formatted because I got final draft; then I
got my higlighters and went through it and flagged up the places where I needed to make
changes and stuff. It was a lot easier that way than just reading it. I had to rewrite some
bits a few tomes but it was better in the long run.

We were all given a checklist of about 6 things we had to include in the extract. I think I
have included them all though I am not too sure whether I have set the tone very well. It
sounds a bit confused but maybe I just think that because I know what's coming after it.

It's hard to know which bits are going to work on the big screen because everything is

exactly right in your head and you have to transfer that to the page. It's hard to get down
all the detail, so I wrote down as much of it as I could and the bits that seemed important.

We've watched so many movie openings in class and I find that I am subconsciously
watching the openings when I go to the cinema with friends. There are certain tricks and
conventions that all scripts adhere to, some more successfully than others. This enabled me
to write to style and try to get the timing a bit more right than I had. My timing is still off,
but it's better than it was at first.

The deleted scene:

6. INT - SUBURBAN KITCHEN - MORNING

A tall, but plumpish woman is at the sink washing some cups. Bright sunshine is pouring

through the window at her side. A card reading WITH DEEPEST SYMPATHY stands alone on
the window sill. The woman refuses to look at it and keeps her eyes fixed on the glass in her
hands. Behind her, a young boy of six, Billy, is sitting at the table playing with his cereal and
swinging his legs.

A slim, short girl of 13 skips into the room, in her school uniforms. She is dragging a brush
through her hair and carrying a pile of letters in the other hand. The name stitched into the
gym t-shirt she is wearing reads KATE. She also looks quickly away as her gaze falls on the
card. A car horn BEEPS twice outside and she hands the letters to her mother.