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3. Desire of freedom
a. He want India became a better place
b. He was killed in that protest
Cs: Mahatma Gandhi show to the world that we don’t need to use violence for
get what we want. He was an important role model for his example of
peacefulness, intelligence, and desire of
First Draft
Mahatma Gandhi was an important role model around the world for his
peaceful ideals, his intelligence to solve problems without violence and his
desire of India to become an independent and better society. First, he has
peaceful ideals and intelligence. He never used violence. He never killed
someone. Second, he was very intelligent. He do peaceful protest. He used
good arguments against guns. Finally, he want a better India for everybody.
He wanted India become an independent and better society. He was murdered
in that protest. Mahatma Gandhi shows to the world that we don’t need to use
violence for get what we want. He was an important role model for his
example of peacefulness, intelligence, and desire of freedom.
Final draft
Mahatma Gandhi was an important role model around the world for his
peaceful ideals, his intelligence to solve problems without violence, and his
desire of freedom for India to be a better society. First he had peaceful ideals
and interest. [For this reason, he never used violence. Even, when there were a
lot of people against him, he never kill someone.] Second, he was very
intelligent. [He made peaceful protest to achieve his goals. Also, he always
used good arguments against the guns.] Finally, he wanted a better India for
everybody. [For this reason, he made a huge protest because of India to
become an independent and better society. Unfortunately, he was murdered in
that protest. Mahatma Gandhi shows to the world that we didn’t need to use
violence for get what we want. He was an important role model for his
example of peacefulness, intelligence, and desire of freedom.
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