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that it broke the kitchen window, my mom screamed and we ran away laughing. Another
day, he was acting like a drunk man, then her mom hit him with a ruler because she thought
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he was really drunk, that was so funny. Second, my cousin was a real people person. He
used to make friends saying a joke, though he sometimes didn’t stop talking about boring
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topics. For instance, in a group of unknown people he used to say “the life is like
candies, ice cream, avocado, banana, pizza and chocolate mixed in an iron, because it
seems trash but when you try it everything changes”, everyone laughed and then he did new
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friends. Besides, He used to talk with any woman during hours because he was intelligent.
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12 Finally, my cousin was talented. He was talented because he practiced during hours
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trying to do the best tricks with the ball and played difficult songs on the guitar. For
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instance, he did some tricks with the ball, so he scored a lot of goals in a match. what’s
more, He used to play different songs on the guitar to the girls and they fell in love of him,
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but he sang badly. All my childhood was full of experiences with my cousin. I admired
my cousin Junior because of his sense of humor, talent and kindness I hoped to be like him.
8. Identify the parts of your perfect paragraph
Linkers = K
= topic sentence.
= controlling idea.
= general statements.
= closing sentences
Example sentences; 5, 6, 7,11,14,15.
Explanation sentences; 3, 4, 9, 13.
Quotation sentence; 10.
Underlined = Supporting sentences
Subordinating conjunctions and coordinating conjunctions = red letter
Total sentences; 17.
9. Add closing sentence.
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