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C. Third, He always thought in the things he wanted for his future and how he
expected to do them. Likewise, He used to tell us “if you want to do something

just do it and you will be better than I” or “don’t forget to focus on achieving
your goals”.

7. First Draft
My role model is my uncle Paúl Mena who was a great person in our lives because

he was trustworthy, dynamic and focused. First, my uncle was trustworthy with
everyone, especially with me. I remember when I had a problem, he used to say

“what happened? Tell me”, so that I felt I could tell him my secrets. For that
reason, we started to talk the things that happened and he gave me some advices

to find the solution. Also, he never told other people the things that I used to talk
with him. Second, Dynamism was another of my uncle’s qualities. He liked to

play with my cousins, my sister and me. For example, he said with a big smile

“let’s go to play soccer or do you prefer to listen a story or jokes?” and all of us ran
toward him to have fun. Sometimes he taught us some capoeira’s song because

he practiced that sport, therefore we started to sing with him. Third, All the people
knew my uncle was a focused man. He always thought in the things he wanted for

his future and how he expected to do them. Likewise, He used to tell us “if you
want to do something just do it and you will be better than I” or “don’t forget to

focus on achieving your goals”. In addition, He planned his things very well step

by step, while he was sure of what he was doing and what the benefits were for
his life.

8. Identify topic sentence, controlling idea, general statements,
transitions, explanations
Topic sentence Transitions
Controlling idea Explanations
General statements

9. Add closing sentence

My uncle Paul had been a big example for all people who knew him, that’s why I

admire him for the things that he did and I would like to be like him in my life.

10. Identify the type of closing sentence