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Refers to the topic in a general way; does not repeat the controlling idea/ major
supporting points.
11. Final Draft
My role model is my uncle Paúl Mena who was a great person in our lives because
he was trustworthy, dynamic and focused. First, my uncle was trustworthy with
everyone, especially with me. I remember when I had a problem, he used to say
“what happened? Tell me”, so that I felt I could tell him my secrets. For that
reason, we started to talk the things that happened and he gave me some advices
to find the solution. Also, he never told other people the things that I used to talk
with him even when something was wrong. Second, Dynamism was another of
my uncle’s qualities. He liked to play with my cousins, my sister and me. For
example, he said with a big smile “let’s go to play soccer or do you prefer to listen
a story or jokes?” and all of us ran toward him to have fun. Sometimes he taught
us some capoeira’s song because he practiced that sport, therefore we started to
sing with him. Third, All the people knew my uncle was a focused man. He always
thought in the things he wanted for his future and how he expected to do them.
Likewise, He used to tell us “if you want to do something just do it and you will
be better than I” or “don’t forget to focus on achieving your goals”. In addition,
He planned his things very well step by step, while he was sure of what he was
doing and what the benefits were for his life. My uncle Paúl had been a big
example for all people who knew him, that’s why I admire him for the things that
he did and I would like to be like him in my life.
