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There is a lot of promising material here. You need to keep working awaqy on it until what
is in your head has been fully realised on the page. And you should make sure that you use
industry standard font and type size. It doesn't look right as you've presented it.
ESSAY - this was a clear, well written essay which explored the issue fully using a carefully
thought out structure. You had the effective idea of discussing the four topics of visual,
aural, people and possibility and showing how the four horror films you selected
demonstrated the chosen points.
You did also discuss the way you had chosen to use these topics in your own film script and
covered the visual and aural points well. However, I think you could have gone into more
detail over the way you created your characters in Stormed and how you made the events

in your world believable. Examining your own practice in detail is a useful way of exposing
things to the light and allowing yourself to discover what more could be done to improve
your work.
You've shown a real improvement in clear, analytical thinking which I hope you will be able
to make use of in the next stage of your writing career.

OVERALL MARK - 65