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5. In sentence 11, add often before yawn to avoid overgeneralizing.

6. Both sentences 11 and 12 give examples of behavior at work. Connect them with
and and omit the second subject,They.

7. In sentence 13, replace the adverb never with rarely to avoid overgeneralizing.

8. In sentence 13, add the adjective sugary before snack for a more descriptive
noun phrase.

9. In sentence 14, make the subjects more specific. Replace the first subject with
The coffee and the second subject with the sugary snack.

10. In sentence 14, change and to while to emphasize the contrast between what is
in each hand.

ACTIVITY 11 Original Writing

On a separate sheet of paper, write a descriptive paragraph (at least six sentences)
describing a person, place, or thing. Use at least one noun clause and underline it;
try to use at least two if possible.

Here are some examples of how to begin.
• The characteristics of a positive learning environment include a sense of
community, interesting lessons, and a respectful atmosphere.
• The ideal vacation spot has beautiful views, historic sites, and fantastic restaurants.
• A good manager has several positive characteristics.

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