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7. Identify its parts:

Topic sentence Transitions

Controlling idea Explanations

General Statements

8. Closing sentence:

My brother is the best person I know because he has great qualities. In the future, I

would like to follow his example.

9. Type of closing sentence:

Refers to the topic in a general way; does not repeat the controlling idea/ major

supporting points.
10. Final draft

My Role Model, Cristian
Christian Sarsoza, my older brother, is my role model because he sets an

example of support, level-headedness and compassion. First of all, he is

supportive. He helps my parents with the household expenses and always asks
my mother “What do you want me to bring? “So that he can buy what we need.

In addition, if my parents, my sister or me are sad, he gives us advises or

reassurance to cheer us up, I always feel comfortable by his side. Furthermore,
he is level-headed. He can solve problems and fix our electronic devices and

everything in the house easily. For example, he fixes our computer, cellphones
or even small problems in the car. Also, he is an industrial engineer and he was

among the best students of his career. After his graduation he started to work in
the university because of his good grades. Now that he is not working there

anymore, he does some projects for master's students. Finally, he is

compassionate. He loves to help others especially people in need. For instance,
by the time of the earthquake in Atacames, where the weather is very hot, he

went to help people to rebuild their houses for a week. He said, “Even though
the hot weather and the hard work, it was one of my best experiences in life.”

My brother is the best person I know because he has great qualities. In the
future, I would like to follow his example.

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