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 Point: make your point (topic sentence directly related to key idea in
thesis)
 Evidence: support your point with evidence and examples
 Explain: explain how the evidence supports your point
 Link: link this point to the next point (for the last body paragraph,
conclude the paragraph)

Introductory Paragraph
 Hook: Energy drinks are a significant public health problem.

Discussion of topic/Connection to text: Realize that energy drinks are dangerous for the health.

Thesis Statement: Health risks, legal precedent and financial implications are the issues that
represent Energy drinks.

Body Paragraph 1

Point (topic sentence): high blood pressure and high heart palpitations

Evidence: A recent report by the World Health Organization says that Energy drinks or
beverages represent a significant public health problem.

Explanation: Energy drinks can produce high blood pressure and high heart palpitations with
cardiac problems.

Link (transition): and, but, for, that, who, in fact.

Evidence:
- Take the case of 14-year-old Anais Fournier, who died from a heart
attack in December 2011 after consuming Monster Energy.
- Lanna Hamann, a 16 year old girl who went into cardiac arrest in June
2014 after guzzling Red Bull.

Explanation: compare two issues with the same consequences.

Link: Moreover, while, for example.

Body Paragraph 2

Point (topic sentence): Another argument in favour of restricting access to these beverages is
simply financial.

Evidence:
- Most energy drinks cost about $2 per serving.
- Taking a broader perspective on this issue researches estimate that you
spent $2.3 billion on energy drinks in 2013.

Explanation: A quick buzz is not worth the cost to their bodies or their wallets.