Page 11 - Student: dazed And Confused

One char. A guy who told people and was called crazy. Where is he?
Two is a girl - young, killed in crash, had power and wants to help one to understand.
Three - ancient man, first person to have it, what happened? Did it kill him?

In the triangle bit, talk in riddles, it's fun and makes people think.
Scratch that, people just read it, not gonna spend half hour figuring it out.

Speak from each POV.
Can the char. Speak? Try to make the voices real and normal, not all fancy. Keep speech in
character.

Watch tenses. Past, present? Has it already happened or is it happening now? I think it
should be happening now.

Brother read first draft, said it needs to be heavily rewritten as it makes no sense. Had a go,
redid bits but kept a lot of it the same. I think its pretty much ok as it is but maybe not.

A fte r S a tu rd a y w o rksh o p
Make sure I keep the raw emotion but don't go overboard with it. Shorts need to be quite
pacy - I think it is but must check.

Keep it interesting rather than sentimental - I don't do sentimental.

Inject a voice into first section, at the funeral. Girl. Got whole speech planned. Can't be
very long or I'll go too much over word count. Where is a good place to put it in? After he's
heard her, or before?

Keep the feeling of loneliness and the inability to connect through out. I want people to
think about how lonely it is when there are other people around but you can't talk to them.

Don't swamp the reader with emotion, but not cold either. Don't tell them to feel things, let
them decide.

Don't spend long explaining things. Just mention them and move on.

I want my characters to all find peace or resolution at the end. I want them to still be
confused and hurting but with an ending to this 'chapter'.

Unanswered questions.

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