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Sample Writing answers

TEST 4, WRITING TASK 2

This model has been prepared by an examiner as an example of a ve叩 good answer.

It is truιthat nothing in life. is permanent 怀ιeptιhange. C..hang伪 in f>Dιl内 and our own \ivιs
ar巳 in巳vitable. We all g时 old肘， f「ienas and famil1 movιaw叫， and ourιmplo1m巳nt situation ιan
suaaenl1ιhang巴， Una巳「stanaabl1, man1 pιoplιwish e-v巳叫thingιoula sta1 thιsame. In this essa1, !
would likιto ιonsia巳「 thιrιasons fo「 this viιw and 怀plain wh1 it is b巳忖巳r to emb「aι6ιhangι．

协！anting to foe\ inιontrol of our liv巳S is pιrfιdl1 no「ma\. W巳 0科ιn fe,e\ vulnerablιwhen events in
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soιi肉。ιιu「 whiιh are b叫ona ourιont「ol or when wιιannot be surιof the outιome of somιthing.
To巳 unι巳忖ain叫 ιausea 问 the C..OV!D-1q panaemiιis anιiampk of this. ιhanges in ou「 personal
ιirwmstanιesιan also bιhara to aιιιpt. fo「巳iamplιwhen a f1「iena or famil1 member movιsaw叫，
W巳 ma1 eipe「ienιe a d巴巴p sιns巳 of loss. I「oniιa\11， ιven goodιhangιsιan b「ing unι巳忖ain叫. If w巳
rιιιiv巳 a p「omotion, we ma1 stru99Iιwith impo纣巳「叫narome and wrest＼ιwith a fe,a「 of failure.
Pιspitιthese p巳「fe.d\1 natural h巳lings, ! think it is good to embral巳 ιhange. '$inιιιhangιis
unavoidable, it is muιh bι忖6「 to aιι巳pt r巳alit1 than to bιιomιιonsumea b1 nιgative thinking.
When wι 「巳main positive，时 ma1 find that aιhangιadual\1 bιnefits us in the long run. Ma肘ing
toιhangιalso helps us develop 「伪ilienι巴， a qua Ii叫 that ιan help us faι巳 an obstade and s巴巴 an
oppo忖uni叫 in it.
As highlighted above, soon巳「 O「 lat肘， wιwill all faιιιhange. Whileιhange is unsettling, it is vital
to keep foιusιd on th巳 positiv巳 asp巳ds of ou「 ιi「ιumstanιιs Doing f>D ιan help us unloιk nιw
oppo忖uniti巳S we aian’t know wιre availablιto US.
Here a「e comments from another examiner:

This essay is a high-level response that covers all aspects of the question. In the
second paragraph, reasons are presented on why people in society as a whole and
individuals might resist change. Then, the third paragraph gives clear reasons to
suggest that, overall, this is a positive process. The position is consistent and the
conclusion ties both areas together for a strong finish.

Ideas are logically organised. Cohesive devices (Ironically I Despite these I
As highlighted above I Doing so can] are used highly e忏ectively and paragraphing
is helpful.

Vocabulary is natural and sophisticated [embrace change I deep sense of
loss I consumed by negative thinking I develop resilience]. Sentence structure
demonstrates full flexibility, with a wide range of complex examples within a range
of largely error-free multi-clause sentences.

Little needs to be added to improve the rating other than possibly an example to
illustrate why changes should be seen as positive, in the thi「d paragraph. However,
this is ave「y good high-level response.
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