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Sample Writing answers

TEST 2, WRITING TASK 2

This model has been prepared by an examiner as an example of a very good answe「－

'Somιpιople fiai that wιform an opinion about a p巳「wn within thi忖i f:,C,ιone\$ of mι时1n9 th巳m . A
P巳「f:>On’fl c.lothin9, faιia＼怀P「巳%ion, and evιn th巳 wai ↑h叫 fiha＼：：巳 handfi ιan have a profoundιffιd
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on our judgem巳nt. But ifi thifi natural human tendenci good 0「 bad?
There ifi wmιthing unfair about ou「 inc.lination to juc\9ιp巳ople too quiι＼：：Ii . Ma叫严op＼ιhave had
unfortunate \if巳怀perienι巳fl that ιan a忏ιι↑ th巳l「 ιonfidenιe when mι价1n9 new pιople. 'Shinιfifi mai
ma\::e thιm app巳ar aloof and ιold, but thifi initia\\i i叫 pιrnona meltfi awai whιn wιallow thιma
bit of timιto warm up. Othern do not have 计1e meanfi to drefifi in a wai that \eavιs an imprefifiion.
Inιvitabli, if we w「ite pιoplιo忏 too quiι＼：：Ii, wιιould mififi out on potιntial frienafihi庐， bufiin巳f:,f:,
oppo忖uniti巳s and 巳V巳n 「omantic relationfihipfi.
There ifi another fiidιto thifi that ifi alfio worthιonfiiaerin9. 协lιarιall aware of the effect firfit
impr巳fifiiOnfiιan have. 1干1e「巳 jf:, 巳V巳n a fiaiin9: iOU don’t get a fl巳ιond chanιιto ma＼：：ιa fi「fit
imprιfifiion . Awarenefifi of thifi 「巳aliti fihould motivatιufi to alwaifi ↑rιat peoplιin a f「iendli,
「巳fiP比tful mannιr. If wιfitrive to ma＼：：巳 a good imprefifiion on the pιopl巳 wιmι时， it inι「巳afi巳fl our
overall happin巳fifi and f:>enfie of wι11-bιin 9.

On balanι巴， th巳「巳 ifi no doubt that judging pιople too quiι＼：：Iiιan havιnιgativιιonfiequ巳nιefi. But
Knowing thιpower of firfit imprιfifiiOnfiιan l::eep Ufi on our toefi, motivating Ufi to que纣10n how wι
ιome aι「Ofifi to othe内问ide f1「om thifi, th巳 abiliti to r巳ad peopl巳 quiι＼：：Iiιould alw prιvent ufi
f「om being eafiili ta\::en in bi fiomebodi with ulterior motivefi.

Here are comments from another examiner:

This response presents both sides of the argument and the ending concludes that
forming impressions early can be either positive or negative. The second paragraph
presents the downsides of judging too rapidly: the impact of low confidence,
being shy or not having smart clothes. It also notes that people could miss out on
friendships, oppo时unities and 「omance if they judge too harshly.

The third paragraph is not entirely relevant. The question asks about the evaluation
people make about the ‘kind of person’ and whether ‘we like them' but this paragraph
mainly gives advice on how to behave when meeting new people. It should be more
aligned to the question and present the advantages of forming ea「ly impressions.

There is ave叩 wide range of vocabulary with some higher-level items [affect
their confidence I aloof I icy persona I strive to make I come across]. Overall, the
response includes a variety of accurate complex grammatical structures, with many
long sentences containing a number of clauses.
Vocabulary and grammatical structures are ve「y strong, accurate and flexible
throughout. To improve the response, the third paragraph could present more
clearly the advantages of quick decisions about the people we meet.
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