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Sample Writing answers

TEST 2, WRITING TASK 1

This model has been prepared by an examiner as an example of a ve叩 good answer.
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Here are comments from another examiner:

This is a strong response to the task; it addresses all three bullet points and uses a
suitable tone to communicate with the manager of the organisation. The response
is presented in the correct letter format, with an appropriate ending, and there is
clear progression th 「oughout the letter.

The range of vocabula叩 is wide and precise [ga的 some insight into I develop my
soft skills I mentor assignedJ, without errors. The w「iting contains a wide range
of st「uctures, including conditionals [if] and passives [it has been decidec巧， with
accurate multi-clause sentences.

This is a good example of a highe「－ level response.

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