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Sample Writing answers

TEST 1, WRITING TASK 2

This model has been prepared by an examiner as an example of a ve「y good answer.

Job r,ee,ke,rn o古巴n qu巳纣ion whe:甘1e,「 it jf, bι竹巳r to work fo「 a large o「 a r,ma\\ ιom pan~. I would pe,「切nall~
pref1ιr to work for a large「 ιompa叫， b川｜在 likιtoιonr,ider the advantager, and dir,advantager, of both.
In gen巳「al, largerιompani臼 ιan r,uppo付 theirιmpl叫比s more e,ffodive.11 bιιaur,e, th叫 have aιιιr,r, to
mor巳「巳切U「己伪. 1he,r,e,ιould inιludιnighιr r,ala「i饨， ιnd-of-1ear bonur,饨， and other pe,「问刨出 ar,
an 怀ιι\lent food r,erviιe and even r,po巾 faliliti伪. Largιιompaniιr, ma1 alr,oιont「ibute mo「e to 1our
p「ofi巳r,r,ional dev巳lopment, o仔ering regula「 ιonf巳「巳nιιs and trainingιOU「f,e,f,,
\he f>iL巳 of a largeιompan1 ir, alr,o an indiιation of th巳i「 f,Uιι巳馅， meaning that itιan offo「 9「归化「
彻bil，叫.1he「巳 ir, alw a b州时 ιnanιιfor promotion and 己矿部r development inιompaniιr, with ma叫
de归付ments and a larger managemιnt r,trudurιDfιourr,e, advanιement ma1 notιome ear,il1 bιιaur,ιit
ir, hard to r,tand out when ma叫 emplo1巴巴s a「ιViing fo「 the r,amιrole.

In r,ma\\ ιom归ni饵， 1ou ma1 f1饵i \er,r, likιa numbι「 and that 1ourι何o付r, aιtuall1 make a difforenα. You
will alw n巴巴d to wea「 di忏巳「巳nt hatr,, whiιh hιlps 1ou develop a r,kill r,e,t that mig忖 not bιpor,r,i队已 in a large「
ιompa叫 1he downr,id巳 ir, a high巳「己hanαof r,trained 「ιlationr,hips b比au古巴 working in dor,e, proiimitt with
the 臼mιr,mall group of 严ople ev巳叫 da1ιan bιGhallengi吨， 'Smallιompani臼 ιan alw be unr,tab\e. If th叫
lor,ιa largιauount O「 ιon创mιr tar,t-巳r, lhang仇 1our por,计，onιould wddιnl1 bιιomιpruariour,.
Bar,e,d on th巳 above, I'd 5ai that the kind ofιompan1 1ou wo「k for dιpe,ndr, on pι「切nal preformιι， b时
1our futu「6ιaree「 pror,pe,dr, ma1 bιbι竹er in a largeιompan1,

Here are comments from another examiner:

This 「esponse covers both aspects of the task, including the pros and cons of each
type of workplace, with some useful detail and good suppo同ing ideas. Ideas are
logically organised and cohesion is ve叩 well managed throughout.

There are a range of linkers [Of course I Based on the above] and other cohesive
devices [both I your I their I which], which means it is easy to read. Paragraphing
is generally good, with the introduction and conclusion sitting separately. However,
the second and third paragraphs would be better combined, as they both address
'large’ companies.

Vocabulary is strong and there are some natural and sophisticated examples [vying
for I wear di疗erent hats I strained relationships]. Grammar is flexible and accurate,
with a range of structures including modals [can I may I cou/c巧 and conditionals [If]
as part of complex, multi-clause sentences. Errors are rare.

This is a good example of a high-level response.

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