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ACTIVITY 10 Steps to Composing

Read the paragraph. Then follow the directions in the 10 steps to edit the information
and composition of this paragraph. Write your revised paragraph on a separate sheet of
paper. Be careful with capitalization and punctuation. Check your answers with the class.

COMPARISON PARAGRAPH

Cultural Interpretations of Facial Expressions

1 Facial expressions may be similar all over the world. The way facial expressions
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are interpreted is not similar all over the world. The interpretation of facial expressions
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changes from culture to culture. People all over the world smile. Everyone recognizes
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a smile as an expression of friendliness. However, some cultures smile more often than
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others, and the cultures that smile less often might think that people who smile often are

not sincere. Some Northern European cultures feel this way about Americans who tend
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to smile too easily. Another example of smiles being used in a culture-specific way is in
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Asia. People smile there when they feel nervous or anxious. Very few other cultures do
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this. This type of smile is not understood well outside of Asia. Eastern and Western
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people focus on different parts of the face to read each other’s facial expressions. For
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example, Chinese people tend to focus more on a person’s eyes. Westerners tend to
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focus more on a person’s mouth and eyebrows. Finally, different cultures have different
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social rules about eye contact. In America, for example, it is critical to maintain eye
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contact. In some countries, it is considered rude to make eye contact with a teacher
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or a boss.

1. Combine sentences 1 and 2 with the conjunction but. Delete the repeated phrase
similar all over the world from the end of the new sentence.

2. Start sentence 3 with In fact to show that this sentence emphasizes the point in
sentences 1 and 2.

3. Start sentence 4 with For example.

4. Combine sentences 4 and 5 with the conjunction and to connect the ideas.

5. Add a comma and in their opinion to the end of sentence 7 to emphasize that this
is not the writer’s opinion.

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