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The followings are the examples of some effective paraphrasing:

Original Passage Effective Paraphrasing

Just as Sherlock Holmes investigates a case, Bram and Peebles (2014) advocated for
psychologists must evaluate all the available data psychologists to evaluate all the available data

before making a deduction, lest they jump to an before making a deduction, just as Sherlock
erroneous conclusion on the basis of insufficient Holmes investigates a case, lest they jump to

evidence (Bram & Peebles, 2014, pp. 32–33). an erroneous conclusion on the basis of

insufficient evidence (pp. 32–33).
A business firm’s obligation, beyond that required Business should focus on objectives that are

by the law and economics, is to pursue long-term not only legal and financially appropriate, but
goals that are good for society (Robbins et al, 2003, are of long-range benefit to society (Robbins et

p.138). al, 2003, p.138).
Students frequently overuse direct quotation in In doing research papers, students often quote

taking notes, and as a result they overuse too excessively, failing to keep quoted material
quotations in the final (research) paper. Probably down to a desirable level of about 10% of the

only about 10% of your final manuscript should paper. Since the problem usually originates
appear as directly quoted matter. Therefore, you during note taking, it is good to minimize the

should strive to limit the amount of exact amount of the recorded word from the source
transcribing of source materials while taking notes when you are gathering your notes (Lester,

(Lester, 1976, p.46-47). pp.46.47).

After learning how to paraphrase effectively, read the excerpts and the paraphrases below.

Match the excerpts and the correct paraphrases.

Original Paraphrase
a. “When students feel supported and cared for on a. Understanding how to increase student
a day-to-day basis, this allows them to build their involvement is important because there are
understanding of what positive relationships look practical strategies instructors may take to do
and feel like, which they can then generalize into so.
other aspects of their lives” (Furlong & Rebelez-
Ernst, 2014).
b. “A number of causes can drive an economy to b. The major cause of recession is a series of
bounce back, including fiscal and monetary economic events, such as interruptions in the
policies, technological progress, and population supply chain, a financial crisis, or a global
growth” (Kannan, et.al, 2022). disaster, can lead to a recession.
c. “Student engagement is worth learning about c. Since interaction makes the teaching and
because there are things teachers can do to learning process go more smoothly and
successfully develops students' communication

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